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Comments for 'Assault Part 1: Ambushed'



Joe Ehret
10:16 pm | March 23, 2004
Sorry for all of you how dislike this story but this is my first and I'm only 13 so it'll get better
Joe Ehret
1:18 pm | March 22, 2004
This takes place a year later so Kelly is back, and I'm sorry for all of you who liked Will but the other Spartans are the first ones who came to mind and I like working with even numbers. So hope you still enjoy it. Check for part 2 soon.
crashedwarthog
9:13 am | March 22, 2004
okz my bad, i've only read Fall of Reach so i'm a bit sketchy at the moment on those details lol, but anyway, i stand by my other comments, just make more details:) and to Ahhhhh's comment, there can never be too much dialogue lol, dont know watcha talkin about
Ahhhh,
3:33 am | March 22, 2004
Too much dialog, brain can't comprehend..must kill. Not to bad, cut back on the dialog
SpartanFortyFour
2:14 am | March 22, 2004
uhh Shadow, Will never did die in the book
SOS.Odin
10:52 pm | March 21, 2004
not bad
bout all i got to say
shadow
4:09 pm | March 21, 2004
didnt will survive too ,if not please tell me how he died again
Hell Starter -- Justin
2:01 pm | March 21, 2004
Yea, well if you read the whole book, Kelly gets abducted leavin linda and fred.
Joe Ehret
12:40 pm | March 21, 2004
crashedwarthog, the reason they're back is if you read Halo:First Strike is that they get back in time the extract them from Reach.
crashedwarthog
7:32 am | March 21, 2004
uh, yeah this is an alright story, but why are Linda Fred and Kelly back, if this is set after halo? just do a little more details and try to make your story longer with some explaining of the situation, like where they are and the real details of the mission not just getting a crystal like data thing lol. Grammar is pretty much perfect which is not what i can say for most stories around. Keep it up, i'm sure you'll get better:)


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