halo.bungie.org

They're Random, Baby!

Fan Fiction


Comments for 'Titan - Chapter 5'



Anonymous
6:59 am | May 24, 2004
fart machine
Jaywhit10
9:27 am | September 4, 2002
That seems like an interesting idea,i might try it on another series. But right now im gonna stick with this style because i don't want to confuse myself on changing the battle sequnces
Wado
10:35 pm | September 3, 2002
Alright, I thought the Elemental was already identified as a hostile. "The Elemental and First Light fired their MACs. The Elemental's MAC round missed because of its long distance."

Guess I was just confused. Nice story, have you thought about writing your battle sequences asynchronously. What I mean is describe a few actions and results from one ship, then in a separate paragraph describe what another ship is doing rather than going back and forth between ships so much in mid paragraph. Just a suggestion, that's all.

Jaywhit10
8:47 pm | September 3, 2002
I'll answer the Elemental, before they fired you didn't want to open fire on a "Friendly" unit until you figure out that they are a nme.
Wado
7:10 pm | September 3, 2002
Story is great don't die on us. I still get lost in the action, however. Hmm... Chaos of battle? I need things simple like red dots bad guys, blue dots good guys, hey look that red dot ate that blue dot... lol.

Keep it up though, story is really interesting. I don't have a clue to the answers to your two questions but I have some questions of my own:

(1) why didn't they just destroy the Elemental before its weapons powered up completely (did they really think they had time to run a bunch of Pelicans down to the surface before the weapons slowly armed and if so slowly arming, why not blow the thing up first?)

(2)Well I guess I lied, only got the one question.

Jaywhit10
6:50 am | September 3, 2002
When i put that it didn't mean u couldn't post comments, please post some im dying over here
Jaywhit10
8:29 pm | September 2, 2002
Ok I have some little questions for all my readers. 1# Why did the First Light and Elemental attack their fellow ships 2# What was the unknown ship, think of those things and if any of you people get close enough i might just add a 3rd for you to consider
Knightmare
6:47 pm | September 2, 2002
And you just got told again! ;-)

Don't worry I'm just kiddin' ya', your story was great.

Jaywhit10
6:00 pm | September 2, 2002
This page is for comments, not reminding me of the way I write. Including yours people told me that about 5 or 6 times already
Jaywhit10
6:00 pm | September 2, 2002
...................
Knightmare
5:53 pm | September 2, 2002
"What?" "Me?" "No, I'm gonna' talk to you!" "Me?""No HIM!" "Oh," "What, me?" "No He dies!" "Fly the ship away!" "Kill that?" "No talk to him!"

etc.



bungie.org
brr!