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Comments for 'Urban Warfare Ch.3: To the Belly of the Beast' |
hunter_that_dances
9:18 pm | July 10, 2004
strange....no criticism from helljumper...oh well
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CoLd BlooDed
9:57 pm | July 9, 2004
It was decent, your use of the code is acceptable. The dialogue is a tad unrealistic, but I liked it. Yes, you should write out the numbers.
I can only see what happens in the next chapter.
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Dave Luck
8:29 pm | July 8, 2004
Hmm..
Okay, okay.
- Dave.
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HoZ
4:51 pm | July 7, 2004
very good chapter as said before your battle dicription 8.5/10
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Jessica
11:38 am | July 7, 2004
Hehehehe
Jess
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!@#$
7:03 am | July 7, 2004
Very good writing!
I noticed something really funny...
Ship Master Anka 'Yourmomzee was furious.
or
Ship Master Anka 'Your mom zee was furious.
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Jessica
12:32 am | July 7, 2004
Hehehe, that sounded really wierd when you asked what were numbers...Aside from that, it was a good story, 8/10 ^.^
Jess
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hunter_that_dances
3:32 am | July 6, 2004
ahhh....
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russ687
10:33 pm | July 5, 2004
It was okay.
7.5/10
Oh yeah, numbers; like 1, 2, 3, 4, etc.
except write them out like one, two, three, four, etc.
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hunter_that_dances
9:47 pm | July 5, 2004
um, this might sound like a stupid question, but what the heck r numbers?
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Slit Throat
9:43 pm | July 5, 2004
Nice! Very well written; just write out numbers and you should be fine.
About the next part though… where'd you get that idea? It sounds good, maybe I'll use it.
Wait a minute, I already did!
lol
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hunter_that_dances
5:45 pm | July 5, 2004
um, i noticed a big nistake in the title. it was supposed to be to the brain of the beast
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Kosh_123
4:37 pm | July 5, 2004
You are a good writer and I liked the story, especially the description of the battles--very good. You should, however, write out numbers. A good rule of thumb that I use is to write out numbers less than twenty. It just make your writing that much more professional sounding. Anyway I enjoyed the story very much and look forward to seeing where you take it.
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