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Comments for 'Part one-- Amnesia'



JJiggssaw
12:00 pm | February 24, 2004
Geez MCC the bridge metaphor gets old after a few humdred times. I say just run it through another person who knows grammar well then post. Oh and if you haven't already read the fall of reach.
Horror
3:06 am | February 24, 2004
I think I speak for me and Max Payne, when I say I hate cliche's espically those with bridges.

As for the story, it was good but personally I've always felt that you should not do a fan fic with the MC, only because his story is written. Don't let that stop this story just kinda bear that in mind for future stories.
Helljumper
5:08 pm | February 23, 2004
Interesting

ODST
First to rise, last to fall
Helljumpers do it all


Feet first into hell
MC's Cousin
2:08 pm | February 23, 2004
Good. I wil admit that is has some good potential, but right now your "bridge" is heading for nowhere. Make sure you build it over more than a stick in your path.

Signing Off


MCC
Halo_2204
1:54 am | February 23, 2004
Hey guys, thanx for the suggestions. I'll take them into account for the next chapter.
Halo_2204
1:54 am | February 23, 2004
Hey guys, thanx for the suggestions. I'll take them into account for the next chapter.
Mastergrunt
1:43 am | February 23, 2004
What's with the marine or is that secret for now?
blind_snowman
11:23 pm | February 22, 2004
Good, but watch your characterisation, (there was some serious eye-rolling over here when the MC said the word 'pickle'.)
JanstheMan
10:05 pm | February 22, 2004
Cool. Work on some of your grammer though. I like the story so far. Very intriguing.


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