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Comments for 'Through the eyes of a grunt Pt 1 of 3'



white grunt
5:02 pm | May 27, 2004
whats the code anyway can anyone tell me?
Nick Kang
10:15 am | May 26, 2004
iI don't mind it when people don't use the code, well, I mean, it gets kinda annoying after a little while. A bunch of other people hate it when you don't use the code.

NK
BansheeBoy
6:05 am | May 26, 2004
Everyone will probably gaet angry for not using the code in my next pieces of fan fic but your advice came too late. Keep that in mind!
Peace Out!
Gold Elite
8:51 pm | May 25, 2004
Yes, indent. Also, there was a few grammer problems here and there, and you spelt a couple of things wrong. You also need to add more detail to help the story flow easier. It wasn't good, but it wasn't bad. You have a good idea, it's just those problems above. Keep going, and keep trying.

PS Your Dead
Nick Kang
8:11 pm | May 25, 2004
You gotta put like indentations and stuff...

NK
whitegrunt
5:49 pm | May 25, 2004
its ok
BansheeBoy
5:54 am | May 25, 2004
I read the 'code' but I couldn't find what I'd done wrong. Can someone tell me?
Keyes
5:33 am | May 25, 2004
To MC's Cousin, hey, some people are forgetful. To MadJackel, I'll agree with you on that. And to romac1991, I read your first story, but couldn't find thye second one.
Nick Kang
10:57 pm | May 24, 2004
Well, no offense, my head is gone, but your story was pretty cheesy too.

NK
my head is gone
9:11 pm | May 24, 2004
sorry about the it was cheesy message. i was in a bad mood after reading comments for mine. 7/10
yes i am a stupid idiotic person. thought id answer that for u
my head is gone
9:07 pm | May 24, 2004
Interesting idea though. keep going.
my head is gone
9:05 pm | May 24, 2004
I am a first time writer too (see Prospect Hill). I must say this was cheesy. If your going to use profanity spell it right. And Grunts arent that smart or strong.
Elite Zov
8:04 pm | May 24, 2004
Good enought. :)
Horror
7:06 pm | May 24, 2004
OH NO GANGSTA PIMP DADDY IS BACK AGAIN!

(alteast the izzle is goneizzle)
Nick Kang
6:54 pm | May 24, 2004
Hey romac, where's your story? I can't find it.

NK
Frost Bite
12:14 pm | May 24, 2004
UBER GRUNT AWAY,
Cough sorry couldn't resist... something tells me that the grunt will be fighting MC again...just foreshadowing there
romac1991
10:44 am | May 24, 2004
8:10 AM | May 24, 2004
PRAISE THE LORD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
HALLELUJAH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
THROUGH SOME MIRACLE OF GOD MY STORY GOT THROUGH AFTER TRYING ABOUT A HUNDRED TIMES.
WOULD YOU GUYS PLEASE READ MY STORY AND POST AS LOTS OF COMMENTS SO I CAN BETTER MY WRITING. MY STORY IS CALLED "DEFENDING AMERICA PART 2: DEFENDING DC

THANKS!

ROMAC OUT!
SeverianofUrth
12:52 am | May 24, 2004
And no comments to make, as everyone else already said everything worthwhile.

Chopping off your head with a five-feet long silver sword with a layer of liquid metal inside and engraved with the name "Terminus Est,"

Severian. Of Urth.
SeverianofUrth
12:50 am | May 24, 2004
Oh, man... So you shouldn't write it out on the submission form? Damn it, that's what I do. I can't access my MicrosoftWord -OR- Wordpad. Just the lousy, shitty notepad, and I just write my stuff out from start to finish on the submission form.
MC's Cousin
8:11 pm | May 23, 2004
Should I even read this one? Oh, there isn't really any excuse for not using the code. It is right there for you to read BEFORE YOU POST. Clear as day, but some people are just lazy. I, for one, am not excluded.

Signing Off


MCC
DeathSquadTrooper
5:47 pm | May 23, 2004
I'm with Horror, i didn't get the Bloody English Grunt
GP-02
4:10 pm | May 23, 2004
I thought it was funny. Not one of the best stories I've read, but it is entertaining. And with that being said, good job for your first time. Cant wait for part 2.
BurroFootball 68
3:36 pm | May 23, 2004
Pretty good.
Horror
3:23 pm | May 23, 2004
I liked the story, and I won't say anything about 'the code' (looks like you got a lot of it already) but I will say whats with the bloody english grunt
Nick Kang
3:14 pm | May 23, 2004
That's exactly what I was thinking, Mad.

NK
MadJackal
2:42 pm | May 23, 2004
Well, in my opinion (listen to it or not), you don't have to make up some new name for the Covenant. Remember, that we are writing in English, and even though it is from the perspective of the enemy, we don't know what they call each other in their languages. So, think of Covie stories as translated, where in fact, names like Elites, Grunts, Jackals, Hunters, etc are the only practical name to use. I wouldn't make up a new name, though that's really up to each author.
Nick Kang
2:42 pm | May 23, 2004
I think it's easier to give them their Human-given names, although in a story I'm writing, they all have their natural names.

NK
Keyes
1:28 pm | May 23, 2004
It was alright, but Kang is right. The Code, The Code, you must use the Code. I didn't on my first one, but I'm using it now. Don't worry, it's easy. Also, Grunt, Elite, Jackel, and Hunter are all human given names. Grunts don't call themselves Grunts. Just make up a cool name for them or something.
Nick Kang
12:21 pm | May 23, 2004
Well...I think this is your first story, so I'm gonna go easy on you. You need to make use of the code, which is under the button above the fan fiction submission form. (Not the yellow box.) But don't worry, barely anyone uses the code on their first stories. The story also lacked detail, but I have seen worse. Much, much worse. It was a little choppy at the beginning, but if you rewrite and spend...I don't know, a few weeks on it, it will be a lot better. And if you wrote it on the fan fiction submission form, don't. Write it out in Microsoft Word first, and then copy and paste it the submission form. You better get prepared, cause some other people on this site might yell at you for not using the code.

NK


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