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Comments for 'The awakening (life of a Spartan) chap 3'



agsbladerboy55
8:44 pm | May 9, 2002
thanks robo thast all i need to know instead of your full of crap its my first time and i hadnt read the fall of reach yet and i mean i'm sorry i made a few mistakes that i didnt catch i dont know how i could have missed them but i did
agsbladerboy55
8:44 pm | May 9, 2002
thanks robo thast all i need to know instead of your full of crap its my first time and i hadnt read the fall of reach yet and i mean i'm sorry i made a few mistakes that i didnt catch i dont know how i could have missed them but i did
agsbladerboy55
8:42 pm | May 9, 2002
well thak you now i know what to do and what not to do and i'm reading the fall of reach now and i'm understanding it better sorry bout cursing
Jaywhit10
1:23 am | May 9, 2002
Ryan I agree with you no one should curse people out about comments. I only cursed people out my first part and then i stopped. I learned what to do and not to do. I take any critism now good or bad and I change my story apon that. thanks for your time
Ryan
2:02 pm | May 8, 2002
A few things, pal. I've had my story's very badly insulted before, and I've NEVER cursed at someone giving me constructive critism and trying to help me! Your writing quality is very low, and once more, your facts are mixed up beyond belief. Two suggestions. 1. Read "The Fall Of Reach", by Eric Nylund. I wrote about three editions of my "Well Enough Alone" before reading it, and following the book I've seen a greater understanding in the workings of Halo - and a improvement in my story.2. Grammar and decency, mister. Grammar is something not all of us are blessed with, however, most posters here make an effort to at least use it properly. Secondly, not all of us come from a good background; and bluntly, I have a bit of a potty mouth myself on occasion. Still, I refrain from using it in my writing. It DOES NOT help the quality, it vastly decreases it and says some bad things about the author.
Jaywhit10
3:41 am | May 8, 2002
One other thing I should mention. If the Master Chief said that he'd break a General like a toothpick, the MC would probably be court marshelled. Dude take critism lightly, unlike me on the first part of my story I wrote I cussed out everyone who wrote bad things. You'll be fine and listen to what people says to make your stories better
Robo42786
1:01 am | May 8, 2002
lol, k dude sorry
Jaywhit10
12:59 am | May 8, 2002
I have to agree with them, but im not being so harsh. You need to seperate different information so the reader can understand what your writing. And don't get me into this Robo thx.
Robo42786
9:48 pm | May 7, 2002
LOL, damn guys quit fighting, he made a few mistakes big deal, its not like this is an important thing. Bladderboy, your storyline is good but ill tell you the same thing i told jaywhit on his first few chapters, grammer spelling and puncuation check make ALOT of difference in your stories, use them, and proof read. overall a good read keep up the good work :)
agsbladerboy55
8:04 pm | May 7, 2002
I didnt say he'd snap him like a tooth pick to a commander to a general dumb ass learn to read dumb fuck
agsbladerboy55
8:04 pm | May 7, 2002
who gives a shit dumb ass i dont really care
The aracation
4:35 pm | May 7, 2002
YOU ARE FULL OF CRAP.the master Chief is short for Master Chief Petty Officer. A commander has a higher rank than the Master Chief. The whole snapping like a toothpick would land the master chief in front of a firing squad.And the master chief is only a half ton. Not 8 tons.Now your history moron.


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