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Comments for 'The Encounter Part 1:Puzzled Marines'



harley
12:40 pm | December 17, 2002
oh when it says john goes in a beserk way i mean
robert
Xzilen
8:14 pm | December 10, 2002
Keep writing man, you have an interesting plot going
harley
10:39 pm | December 5, 2002
yeah i can understand that well thanks i might do that next time
Vero
8:35 pm | December 5, 2002
Nice action. But some things to work on....Like try to spaces in between people speaking. Makes it easier finding who is speaking instead of trying to guess who is speaking. And the main part of the story was pretty good but the ending sucked. Try to make a little cliffhanger at the end that way people will want to read the next part.


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