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Comments for 'Kirk's Odysee'



Hikaru-119
12:00 am | November 30, -0001
Good length and nicely written. A few spelling errors, but other than that not to bad. Length was nice too.
Hikaru-119
12:00 am | November 30, -0001
Whoops didn't mean to say the same thing twice.
Dispraiser
12:00 am | November 30, -0001
Flackfic Review of 2.

What does that mean? Well, being that this is the first ever flackfic review, it is a rating of how much HBO didn't need it. Scoring a zero means that this fanfic is something original and new, and isn't crap. Scoring a 2 means that there is some grammar errors. Scoring a ten, as logic would imply, means that the fanfic is something that HBO does not need because of it's lack of originality, grammar, spelling, ect.

Kudos for making excellent use of HBO submission code, though it seems as if most people now use it.
Dispraiser
12:00 am | November 30, -0001
Also, are you Gasmask?
Alpha Lance
12:00 am | November 30, -0001
This is an excellent story. It's not like alot of the newbie's stries. You have a great series going, and the lenght is good. Well, I just have to agree with Dispraiser.
Hawk7886
12:00 am | November 30, -0001
Is that supposed to be "Flak" as in,
"Anti-aircraft artillery.
The bursting shells fired from such artillery.
Informal.
Excessive or abusive criticism.
Dissension; opposition."?

Excessive or abusive critcism. I don't think you want to be either.

Also, the story had repetitive errors showing me you didn't know the correct way. 'Their' was misspelled, and you didn't punctuate your sentences right.

"GET DOWN!" Ordered the Sarge.

"I don't know if we are going to make it," doubted the shell-shocked soldier, "There are too many of them!"

I got bored after seeing the same mistakes repeated over and over again.

4/10
Dispraiser
12:00 am | November 30, -0001
Well, flack as in WW2 style weapons. A flackfic clouds the sky of HBO with uneeded fanfics, so, my flackfic review says how much it is flack... So, simply put... 10 bad. 1 good. 0 perfect.
Mainevent
12:00 am | November 30, -0001
I must have missed the originality, and did you spell Kirk, Kirt once?
Gasman
12:00 am | November 30, -0001
Sorry about the mistakes, I'm working on a new one, I do not have Spellcheck, i'm typing all this on wordpad. Thanks for your support. Contact my AOL Instant Messenger Name: warbrittpaintbal if you have any questions or just want to talk. I'm game for anything Halo!


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